Hey there from the seniors with teammalaysia. I thought I should give you a few thoughts on the poem. It's a creative process but I hope a few pointers. First I think it lacks cadence. That or I am missing it. Aside from that, I think the starting of it can and should draw the reader in, so something along the lines of 'my soul wails at the injustice of life' something a bit more dramatic.

These are all suggestions by the way. Been a while since I last taught literature hahaha. Anyways, all the best, le me know if you need help