Finish the Story Contest - WEEK #19
A contest with a pot of 5 @steembasicincome shares? You're in the right place!
67 @steembasicincome shares awarded till now through the contest!
Prize categories:
1st place : n. 2 steembasicincome shares
2nd place : n. 1 steembasicincome share
Popular jury : n. 1 steembasicincome share (remember to vote your favorite!!)
Sponsor's pick: n. 1 steembasicincome share
Things that please the Bananafish mighty god!
- vote, vote, vote your favorite story!
- Try to post your story the earliest possible and not at the last moment.
- Sustain, comment and upvote each other as a true group of friends and fiction lovers.
- Respect the 500 words limit.
- Post in your blog instead than in the comment section.
- help our contest & workshop to grow by giving it some visibility.
And now.. let's dive into today's story!
I Will Write No More
Prague, 22 September 1994
Dear silent friend,
once again, I will force you to bear the tremulous handwriting of this pathetic old man.
Time has yellowed my fingers and your pages in equal measure. But I know you will not complain in finding yourself soiled by my memories once again, after such a long time, after the hiatus of decades of life, spent far away from the ancient leather of your cover. And I hope it did not bother you to try the tickling of my pen again. Not more than three spots of water and ten sheets before this, you still were curiously waiting for the hand of a fourteen-year-old, full of dreams and watercolours.
As I write, the mist rises from Moldova and lingers among the ancient gothic spires, guardians of forgotten secrets, while a pale September sun, as a master of alchemy, transmutes in gold water and heavens.
There is this little kestrel who, for a few days, has been picking on the attic's glass at dusk, while I perform my little preparatory rituals before everything happens like every night. The graceful winged evening’s maid urges me to once again cast my gaze on the hundred towers city, but these eyes will no longer be able to patiently stand on the surface of the mystery.
"I discovered a terrible law that links the green colour, the fifth chord and the heat. I lost the joy of living. Power scares me. I will write no more”. Such were your feelings, Gustavo, and I still remember your trembling voice when you confided in me, the last time we met, before the great war swallowed everything and everyone, forcing us to interrupt our occultic studies. Only now that the layers of reality have finally crumbled before my eyes, like a sedimentary stone on the sides of a primordial river, I can grasp the true meaning of your words. The anxious joy of discovery, mixed with the ancestral vertigo of sidereal abysses, has overwhelmed me and continues to overwhelm me every night I leave.
And, just as in the layers of rock are the remains of creatures lost in time, even these levels of reality are not devoid of surprises .. and encounters. By now, I'm sure they saw me, but I cannot help but go back. Of all, I know that the faceless child already waits for me, every time closer, just beyond the threshold. He craves my warmth, my vibration and, this time, I do not know if I will manage to continue playing the game of deceiving him, while I persevere to the end. Certainly, I cannot draw back right now that my human life ends and, at the same time, I’m experimenting one, a hundred, a thousand lives.
Forgive me, dear diary, for having forced you to bear my poor ravings again. Perhaps, we’ll never meet again. The kestrel flew towards the old city. It's time to leave.
Join the fun! Here is how this contest works:
An unfinished fiction story or a script is posted.
You finish it with your own post or a comment in the comment section. A limit of 500 words is recommended.
YOU WIN! 4 @steembasicincome shares to the writers with the best ending.
The result will be out on Tuesday 10th July, 14:00 PM - two o' clock in the afternoon GMT+7 (U.S. West Coast time zone). Submission deadline: Monday 9th July, 12:00 PM - noon
My involvement over here, folks. Grateful for your reading.
Prague, 23 December 1994
Dear silent friend
It's other hands writing to you today. Maybe you could feel that my strokes are lighter and rounder. I have given myself the strength to open you up and see everything inside you. What you have carried inside so far I know has made you heavier, but it has also made you a chest full of great treasures. For a long time you have collected words and feelings that have made noise in an old heart.
Through you I see the days I was not there and they needed me, when the birds were the only visible company. You and the birds. In your lines I feel the tiredness of a body that was bending and a lucidity that was being lost. True: there is much light in you, but there are also abysses, gaps, darkness. The letters outside the stripes, the studs, the blotchy blur on the page speak of a few final days and wet eyelids that make me write to you quickly so I don't stumble over the same tears.
The owner of your pages is gone one day, the boy he saw so much came to get him and took him away while he was sleeping. He sewed his eyes and mouth shut, and like a bird, he took him to the sky. I know you keep his formulas. We won't talk about that. Only to you could he leave the most precious of his treasures: knowledge. Now I see clearly the influence of nature on him, the desperation of his keenness and will.
I wante to open up and write to you today on Christmas Eve to tell you that you have not betrayed anyone, that you are still keeping his secret, that you are still a silent friend. For my part, I will seal you and keep you, you will become his memory. Whoever comes to read to you will find him. My father is not dead, he has left his soul in you.
Forever and ever, your daughter
You leave us wondering what happened to the father and the faceless child beyond the threshold.. but still, I love your intimate approach and the fact that you keep the diary idea. It's always nice to have you with us, and, by the way, that article you wrote about Venezuela and Goya's painting is wonderful.
Oh, doubly grateful for your comment, @f3nix. It's always good to have you as a reader. Greetings
Enjoy how you kept the communication in a letter.
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A daughter writing on the diary of her father, alchemist and occultist, trying to know who he was from his writings... it sounds like a story Isabel Allende could have written :D
Week #20 emerged from the shadows.. will you be brave enough, storyteller?
Very nice beginning! I like so much the diary page form, and I recognize one of the themes that are closest to you, the alchemical one!
This is my ending of the story :
The Philosopher's Heart
Furthermore, I wanted to inform everyone that I would like to take charge of one or two of the week's prizes ... @f3nix let me know if it's okay with you, and if you'd like me to add SBI to the prize pool or take charge of any of the 4 that are already up for grabs! ;)
This is a great gift for all of us, Marco! You may take care of the 4 sbi and I'll add a third place, raising the pot to five sbi, you rock as always!
Another great prompt to get us going! Here's my entry for this week:
https://steemit.com/poetsunited/@cyemela/finish-the-fiction-story-contest-week-19
Thanks my friend! This is part of an idea for a longer story (almost as always).
Here's my take. I loved the set up. finally had time to write out a response. Cheers everyone
Thanks Dirge, Prague is a truly evocative city.
I'm sorry I'm so late to the party @f3nix, been a very busy week with Project Giving and all. Also, sorry it's such a mammoth entry, something took over my pen. Here is my story ending called:
Yes finally did it
here is my entry for this week Finish the Story Contest - WEEK #19 | The Door of Truth
Wow! Hope you found it inspiring Mav.. there's a true reference in this story.
@maverickinvictus gets my vote this week. Like the line about "To obtain something of equal value must be lost."
I hoping to have time this week to write this one :) Thanks for hosting such a fun contest!
I hope so too, Lynn, you've a truly creative mind. Plus, there's an added curiosity when it's about one of your fiction ideas..😉
Thank you @f3nix ! I must say that your prompt thru me a bit and it's one I'm going to need to think on a bit. The last one popped in my head before I even finished reading 😅
Stop trying to grease the wheels with your compliments 😎
Well, if they make you think then I succeeded 😉
hahaha I curate for asapers and will pop this in their contest channel (are you a member by any chance?) and I'll put it in @newbieresteemday as well.
Blessings for spreading the Bananafish gospel, beloved acolyte!(echoing voice :-P)
haha @bananafish, I totally heard the echoing voice!
Hi, I did it! Went really gothic this time. That was fun. Here's my idea of an ending: https://steemit.com/writing/@agmoore/finish-the-story-contest-19-i-will-write-no-more
Welcome back bud! Gothic is always a win.. let's see.
First, a great contest, I was interested and decided to participate. I hope you will at least a little like my contribution. I'm looking forward to further competitions, too.
Here is my entry https://steemit.com/writing/@stormlight24/finish-the-story-contest-week-19-faded-memories.
Welcome to the contest/community @stormlight24! The competitions are weekly so you'll always find one to participate.. come for the rewards stay for the people, that's what they say ryt? :-)
"come for the rewards stay for the people" - I totally agree :)
I would hold my judgment before knowing them well..bwahahaha :-P
hahahahahahhaah it's fair :D
Here be my submission: Shu’ualathoi for this contest.
A praise just for their name!
:^D