really cool but u stole it from @derekjones so I only upvoted u as a favor to u, but u wont get any more upvotes if u STEAL content

please dont STEAL content
i do like the story and if u are interested inthis stuff YOU NEED TOW RITE YORU OWN story!

u could have used this story as a fondation and writtenUR OWN!

u need to wrte ur OWN story !!!!