Finish the Story Contest - WEEK #38 - The Taste of Chicken (SCI-FI)

in #fiction6 years ago (edited)

This post is an entry in the 38th Finish the Story contest, hosted by the remarkable @f3nix

Join the fun and write your own ending!

The prompt is interesting. A subject is being experimented on by cold, inhuman beings. Where is he? Is he a he? How can he escape? Will he escape or succumb to madness and mutilation?

With 500 words being the limit, the nature of the escape is going to be limited as well. No novel-long method of a slow escape from the castle by using a toy-sized replica of the castle to weave a yarn from which you can weave into a rope in order to descend down from the tower It'll have to be simpler then that.


image source is Rembrandt

The Taste of Chicken

by @f3nix

"What do you feel now?" The scalpel of a monotonous voice, cold as the halogen light blinding him.
"Let me go".
A sudden electric shock followed and almost broke the arched vertebrae of the specimen n. 19-B, while penetrating his limbs.
"What do you feel?"
"The ... the taste of a chicken".
Dense whispering, silent annotations, white everywhere.
He was floating in that white, for hours, perhaps days. Subtle lines, at the corners of his eyes. The last bulwark of Euclidean geometries. Over him, the ceiling was like an enormous virus. Not alive, not dead. Up there, all the gluttony of a pulsating white blasphemy was unfolding over his impotent being. A dodecaphony, ever hungry of new semitones in the musical scale of his moribund ego.
He felt his soul's entrails slowly peeled like an onion. That non-color was slipping inside him, like a sickly glucose sludge, inside every cavity, along every neuron, hair, capillary. It was a profound evil, different from pain. Pain is a vowel. If you're good enough, you can observe it from the outside of yourself till you inevitably lose consciousness.
That, instead. That was nothing less than a grinding profanation of his soul.
"Now. What do you feel?"
"Whaaat do you feeel ..." was the mumbled answer, the sound resembling the broken lung of a deflating accordion.
Silent annotations following.
The synaptic stimulation was proceeding well, soon they could present the product to Mother Unit. It was said that, in prehistoric times, the human being populated the nano-swarm, when it was still called Earth. According to certain niche schools of thought, this.. thing.. could have been at the top of the food-chain. Go figure.
A new product, very efficient in its own way and not missing that pleasant touch of chaoticness, this human. No doubt that the Mother Unit would have liked it and find it entertaining, if not even useful.
The chief demiurge gently closed the skullcap of the specimen n. 19-B and left the room with its cohort of servile apprentices in tow. Enough for today.

My Ending

Enough for today. Enough for a lifetime. What was needed was respite. Respite from the prodding of the mind, the prodding of his soul. Respite from existence. But that later part could wait. Had to. First things first. 19-B needed to get the hell out of that tesseract. And that’s exactly what he’d be doing with his day.

Four thousand, six-hundred and seventy-one times. It took that many experiments, procedures and otherwise unconscionable forays into his mind before the demiurge or his sycophantic scientists made a mishap. It was all he could do not to smile when they made their way out in tow.

One of the followers left a surgical beam on the tray beside him, just in reach of his hands. He was ready to grasp it and free himself when the fear struck him. Think you can do it? Think you can get out of here? You leave this room and what? You’re just gonna walk out the front door?

“No,” he said out loud. “I got out of that fucking sand whale, I’ll get out of this.”

And if they catch you? You really ready for another four thousand proddings? Cause these wont be reserved. No. They’ll have malice behind them.

“I can deal with that.”

19-B stretched his fingers over the cold tube, sliding it gently into his fingers. He twirled the surgical beam like he’d done a pencil as a kid, back in elementary school. Back in the time, before those nano fuckers turned everything grey. He steadied it and shot that bone-cutting laser onto the steel cuffs and melted them through, freeing his hand and then his other and then his feet.

He fell to the ground, the sense of gravity refreshing and crushing all at once. The atrophied muscles ached and it took him a number of tries to acclimate himself to the odd and arduous trial that was walking.

Told you. A cripple ain’t going anywhere.

“I’ve had enough of these little voices,” 19-B said. “Shut up.”

Can’t. I’m a part of you now. You can end me, you know. You know. You know how.

“Not yet.” 19-B stood up, breathing through the fire that pulsated in his thighs and ankles and back. “I’ve got a lot of shit to do today.”

He smashed his fist on a panel and the door slid open. Stepping out into a hall, bright halogen lights extending off in both directions.

Doors. So many doors. “I wonder…”

Behind those.

“Are there…”

People like us?

“Like me.”

19-B stepped forward to the room across from him. On a holographic display beside the door was the title, “19-A”.

19-B gulped, realizing for the first time just how thirsty he was.

You’re starting to get it, kid. Starting to figure it all out.

“No.”

Open the door. All of them. Let’s have a party.

“First time you’ve said something I agree with. Time to get those sick fucks.”

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Basically Madness Combat, but if it was verbose on the thoughts and kept the same level of violence... I love it (not a surprise considering Freeman’s Mind from Accursed Farms)!

On a more serious note, I was looking at the intro blurb and trying to connect it to the Rembrandt painting (The surgery of Dr. Pulp?). I was figuring that with a “Jack and the Beanstalk” attitude plus with @f3nix’s prompt, I would see a dark ending. And thank th’ Flyin’ Dutchman that it was properly dark and not, as Lorerunner would put it, darkier and edgier. Now face it with the fact that the subject got totu- sorry “tested” to all high Heck by less than competent “scientists” and well we basically have the same level of hatred found in a Grunt in Madness Combat. Now the physical-fighting prowess, hopefully more than a Grunt - but considering he “wants a party” and the such, he can duke it out.

Anyways, to get #philosophical now, the story (prompt+ending) highlight perfectly the cruelty of “scientific” testing on live subje- sorry animals can’t be live subjects. Why? Because some humans think not being a human means yer perfectly immune to pain - what a joke. But this post obviously reflects a Frakenstein response, but if Victor Frankenstein actually stayed with his “monster” and tortured the monster by bringing his other friends along. So this “subject” has to suffer every waking moment like an animal in a factory farm, yet has the ability to rain Heck for which the animals aren’t able to humour. Such is life for the both of them, a cruel fate befallen both and both will suffer ‘til they can truly be free and not be expandable resources.

Upvot’d and resteem’d!
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you're making me want to go play madness again

Hue. And I have to wait for Madness Combat 11 and Project Nexus 2 to come out. So imagine how antsy I’ll be when they near completion.

HaHa!! Cool & manly!

Great, that you spoiled the sport and not let me read the final fight! I love it!

As I am in a silly mood, I'd also like to have 19-B even stumbled around a bit more, being clumsy. ... But don't listen to me.

What I actually wanted to say: I really like what you've done with the story. A clear, unvarnished and direct thing. Thumbs up! And surprisingly you built in this schizophrenic self talk at the same time. Now, how did you do that??
;-)

I love it! Viva la revolución!

Awesome. Very pleasant reading and smooth continuation of the first half. I loved the dialogue with the inner voices and the sentence structure. Neat and effective.

On a personal note, I enjoyed how you understood that everything was developing inside the tesseract.

Enjoy how you stayed true to the start of the story. You gave hope to the person being tormented. They might start a revolution. All they need is for someone to pop in on a hoverbike wearing an exoskeleton to really take those "sick fucks" down. Great way to end it.

Voices in you head always fun to add to a story. Well done.

Nice. That talking sound like my voices in my own head as I write. lol One more step gets me closer to the door and getting free.

Creepy piece, too.

The 39th Edition stands ready for another journey through dreams and imagination. You've until next Wednesday to weave your tale. Will you share your story with us once again?

Like the story, the internal dialog was a great effect. And you gotta love a kick ass guy who doesn't give up and is ready for pay back time.

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